This is much better
But before approving it, I hope that you could make some changes so that Lee will become a more developed character
Firstly, about the physical description, simply by writing "handsome" is not enough for describing Lee. You could choose to include a picture of him or make the description more detailed
Secondly, it would be better if you add more bad points (about 3 more) and good points (1-2) to its personality part, as Lee sounds a bit like a Gary-sue. Also, about the "Favorite place at camp" part, I'm sorry to tell you that it can't be "Trivia's cabin", because there aren't any cabin for a particular god/goddess' children in Camp Jupiter, but cohorts instead. So, you may have to change that...
Thirdly, in the relationship part, you've written that Alexandra who's not a demigod is Lee's girlfriend. So how does he keep contact with her when he's in Camp Jupiter? Are they still close?
About the "power" part in "Battle", I think it would be better if you add limits to Lee's powers. Otherwise, this will be like god-playing which's not allowed here. Also, most campers here are allowed to have at most 3 powers, so you may need to edit that part...(by the way, what's "necromacy"? I've never heard of this before
Also, what kinds of incarnations can Lee do?)
Moreover, where's the "strengths" and "weaknesses" parts? You as well have to fill those parts in. Um...I don't think "Bugs" can be a fatal flaw... Flaw flaw should be something like having low self-esteem, being stupid, pride, etc.
Lastly, about the biography part, um...it's a good try, but there're still some problems that need to be solved. Generally, mortals won't be granted any powers like magic. So, you should make some changes on that
Also, most campers in Camp Jupiter have to survived from the training of Lupa before entering the camp. Lee couldn't just appear in the camp from nowhere...
I think this profile, considering it's your first, it's already quite good. Once you've corrected it, we'll approve it
If you don't know how to do, you can take references from other APPROVED characters.
You can also ask me if you need any help
Looking forward to approve yours!!!
By the way, next time when you want to edit your post, just click the black button "Edit" on the top instead of posting a new one
~Katerina, daughter of Athena